There was no humor, no plot, nothing to make you think, and no way to relate. This was pretty aweful. I suggest you actually make some appeal to audiance through story or innovation before you try again.
-Can't access hats while playing as the white guy
-Sometimes it freezes in random fights (likely it's just lag)
-In the car/minigun "level" the quality automatically turns to low
-Achievements that were there before disapeer (ignore poor spelling please)
-When you're playing as the yellow guy and you exit to menu or close out of the game, then later hit continue it turns you into the white guy
-On elevator, the yellow guy only starts fighting when the first big guy lands
Those are the only ones I could find that I consider "glitches". The gameplay in certain ways definately needs revision, but you've heard all about that haven't you? Overall it's a decent game with it's flaws and would be a great game without them.
Thanks for this.
The quality turns to low because otherwise it runs too slow on some machines on that level specifically.
Some people's save data's messing up because I leep updating the file.
:( ...poor guy. I enjoyed it except for the annoying and high pitched sword sounds, the bad up close characters. Also snow is a pretty lame guy. "I've trained this long for the sword, but you beat me in a duel. So instead of letting you have the sword to kill yourself with it, I'm going to join you on your quest." Whaaa? If I was snow and I gave a damn about the sword, I would backstab him the first chance I got, take the swords, and be done with it.
In other words, he's a very flat character. It's okay for a kid like Korah to be flat and naive character because he's a boy and he's the main character which allows the story to be explained when he learns about it, but not Snow. Snow needs to get in touch with reality, his struggle, his morals, his character, and his surroundings pretty damn quick or this series will die. Make his past apparent in his day to day life (without drawn out flashbacks and memories that drown the drive of a plot).
that God serves man? How utterly blasphomous can you possibly get? If anything doesn't make sense to me about christians right now, it's that. It's that most of mankind thinks they are the last evolution has to offer, that they rule over things that God created (and disrespects them), and believe, truly believe, that they need to be apart from nature (the wonderful thing that God created) to be pure. As well as control nature (the thing that sustains us) to survive and reach "paridise on Earth".
You have some great colors, good music, and fairly good animation. It was creative and simple. I just plainly don't agree with your bit about him creating a house for the man.
I agree in certain aspects, but I did not make the movie to be religious in any way. Its against my personal beliefs as well, I personally am agnostic.
to have fluidity and creativity. Also the theme and style was the same throught the entire flash (which is good). The growing fit the pace of the music and it all worked well with the ideas you've put down. The repetiveness bothered me with the fruit being another fruit, being another fruit, and I'm glad you stopped at two, but if you only had a more creative way of conveying the idea instead of panning out. Also if you changed the mood a tad with each pan it would've been refreshing (simply a change in color used, not style, theme, or anything else that would detract from the cohesiveness.).
The lipsync could have been better, but it is better than most as is. Look at the sixth place in my favorites and look at the lip sync at the credits of that flash to know what I think is the best lip sync that I've seen. It's in profile view, but it's beautiful. "Royal Rumble II Part 2"
The roses need to not use a shape tween to get across the dieing, the friend scene needs to have movement (maybe a different style of character to move and convey friendship).
Also just the matter of you conveying each lyric without any continuity. There wasn't any real development in the narration (of your animation). The takes on all these things were pretty literal, virtually no style (except in the begginning), and no real creativity shines through. Sure you can see it, but it looks more like a gimmick more than anything, something that's "cute".
I say think about developing things more and animating more rather than copying and pasting creatively. If you do a narration of a story the animation will be better, but if you stick with this style you need fluidity, you need for it to all fit. And at the moment this is a shallow shallow submission with a good song, but shallow to the core of it's animation. You had a few thoughts on the matter, but it's far too oversimplified and underthought. You may call yourself an animator, but in no way do I see any credibility of you calling yourself an artist.
Learn better english. I don't care what your mommy says about what you've done or how far you've come to speak such nice english, learn better english (better grammer) or be the subject to hardship and shame.
The animation was okay, but it defiantly could have been better. As I see it when you use sprites you need a story, a song, and/or character development. Especially when you're up against frame by frame animation (original frames) or tweening without the use of premade models. You got by sounding like a ten year old that has trouble with grammer (not someone foreign), but your response to one of the reveiws:
you do not know the critical case swim of English
Brazilians give us a damned hard so that "you" of other countries to see our animations still very much
Does not make a lick of sense. But like I said, I don't care about anyone that supports you and neither does most of Newgrounds. So stop whining and do better or you'll lose possible fans (because noone likes a pussy), votes (because people don't take kindly to being forced to like something) and your future on Newgrounds (because after all Newgrounds is made the way it is by it's veiwers). Pretty good animation, okay, but slightly irratating grammer, and poor poor conduct.
is disgusting. Pretty decent music and background, but you're putting details that are one not needed and two the choice in proportions just does not work. At step 4 you were good, at step five you beat her face in with a garbage lid and filled it with waste. Then you added the spinecrawling eyebrows, a huge neck (a man's neck), and she looks like one of those people at diners that you know have seen a rough ass time in their life. She looks like some trashy excuse for a life that gets by on very little as she watches reruns and talk shows as she sits down to eat her ice cream straight from the container.
My advice: with flash, convey realism, don't try to make it so. Flash is meant for clean lines and you're overdoing realism. It's like if you draw someone with pencil and paper and you include EVERYTHING it makes them look old and ugly. That is precisely what you've done here. You've goen too far and make me want to puke. Go from step for and include one shade of shadow or many consecutive layers CREATIVELY placed. Not how they are in real life, but how you want to CONVEY realism. The only flaw you have is you have realistic shading without realistic proportions OR colors. And of course it's too detailed, in all the wrong ways.
I do agree that the face doesn't look that good. It wouldn't make me puke though, but I see what you mean. I think I'll go with pencil art next time I do a tutorial, thanks for the harsh, but constructive criticism!
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Rated 1.5 / 5 stars December 12, 2008
Quality of animation isn't everything...
There was no humor, no plot, nothing to make you think, and no way to relate. This was pretty aweful. I suggest you actually make some appeal to audiance through story or innovation before you try again.
Rated 4 / 5 stars October 11, 2008
List of glitches (as much as I could find):
-Can't access hats while playing as the white guy
-Sometimes it freezes in random fights (likely it's just lag)
-In the car/minigun "level" the quality automatically turns to low
-Achievements that were there before disapeer (ignore poor spelling please)
-When you're playing as the yellow guy and you exit to menu or close out of the game, then later hit continue it turns you into the white guy
-On elevator, the yellow guy only starts fighting when the first big guy lands
Those are the only ones I could find that I consider "glitches". The gameplay in certain ways definately needs revision, but you've heard all about that haven't you? Overall it's a decent game with it's flaws and would be a great game without them.
Thanks for this.
The quality turns to low because otherwise it runs too slow on some machines on that level specifically.
Some people's save data's messing up because I leep updating the file.
Rated 3.5 / 5 stars August 13, 2008
Did he ever get that drink?
:( ...poor guy. I enjoyed it except for the annoying and high pitched sword sounds, the bad up close characters. Also snow is a pretty lame guy. "I've trained this long for the sword, but you beat me in a duel. So instead of letting you have the sword to kill yourself with it, I'm going to join you on your quest." Whaaa? If I was snow and I gave a damn about the sword, I would backstab him the first chance I got, take the swords, and be done with it.
In other words, he's a very flat character. It's okay for a kid like Korah to be flat and naive character because he's a boy and he's the main character which allows the story to be explained when he learns about it, but not Snow. Snow needs to get in touch with reality, his struggle, his morals, his character, and his surroundings pretty damn quick or this series will die. Make his past apparent in his day to day life (without drawn out flashbacks and memories that drown the drive of a plot).
Rated 2.5 / 5 stars July 25, 2008
Why is it you think...
that God serves man? How utterly blasphomous can you possibly get? If anything doesn't make sense to me about christians right now, it's that. It's that most of mankind thinks they are the last evolution has to offer, that they rule over things that God created (and disrespects them), and believe, truly believe, that they need to be apart from nature (the wonderful thing that God created) to be pure. As well as control nature (the thing that sustains us) to survive and reach "paridise on Earth".
You have some great colors, good music, and fairly good animation. It was creative and simple. I just plainly don't agree with your bit about him creating a house for the man.
I agree in certain aspects, but I did not make the movie to be religious in any way. Its against my personal beliefs as well, I personally am agnostic.
Rated 4.5 / 5 stars July 12, 2008
In this one you've done well...
to have fluidity and creativity. Also the theme and style was the same throught the entire flash (which is good). The growing fit the pace of the music and it all worked well with the ideas you've put down. The repetiveness bothered me with the fruit being another fruit, being another fruit, and I'm glad you stopped at two, but if you only had a more creative way of conveying the idea instead of panning out. Also if you changed the mood a tad with each pan it would've been refreshing (simply a change in color used, not style, theme, or anything else that would detract from the cohesiveness.).
The lipsync could have been better, but it is better than most as is. Look at the sixth place in my favorites and look at the lip sync at the credits of that flash to know what I think is the best lip sync that I've seen. It's in profile view, but it's beautiful. "Royal Rumble II Part 2"
Rated 3 / 5 stars July 12, 2008
You need better effects in some areas...
The roses need to not use a shape tween to get across the dieing, the friend scene needs to have movement (maybe a different style of character to move and convey friendship).
Also just the matter of you conveying each lyric without any continuity. There wasn't any real development in the narration (of your animation). The takes on all these things were pretty literal, virtually no style (except in the begginning), and no real creativity shines through. Sure you can see it, but it looks more like a gimmick more than anything, something that's "cute".
I say think about developing things more and animating more rather than copying and pasting creatively. If you do a narration of a story the animation will be better, but if you stick with this style you need fluidity, you need for it to all fit. And at the moment this is a shallow shallow submission with a good song, but shallow to the core of it's animation. You had a few thoughts on the matter, but it's far too oversimplified and underthought. You may call yourself an animator, but in no way do I see any credibility of you calling yourself an artist.
Rated 5 / 5 stars July 2, 2008
Apology accepted...
Well I'm going to cry now...
Rated 2 / 5 stars June 30, 2008
Look if you want to appeal to a larger group...
Learn better english. I don't care what your mommy says about what you've done or how far you've come to speak such nice english, learn better english (better grammer) or be the subject to hardship and shame.
The animation was okay, but it defiantly could have been better. As I see it when you use sprites you need a story, a song, and/or character development. Especially when you're up against frame by frame animation (original frames) or tweening without the use of premade models. You got by sounding like a ten year old that has trouble with grammer (not someone foreign), but your response to one of the reveiws:
you do not know the critical case swim of English
Brazilians give us a damned hard so that "you" of other countries to see our animations still very much
Does not make a lick of sense. But like I said, I don't care about anyone that supports you and neither does most of Newgrounds. So stop whining and do better or you'll lose possible fans (because noone likes a pussy), votes (because people don't take kindly to being forced to like something) and your future on Newgrounds (because after all Newgrounds is made the way it is by it's veiwers). Pretty good animation, okay, but slightly irratating grammer, and poor poor conduct.
Rated 5 / 5 stars June 26, 2008
This fits the old and great logo of Newgrounds...
"The problems of the future, today!" There hasn't been something this sick in A LONG TIME. THANK YOU FOR BEING TWISTED!!
Rated 3.5 / 5 stars June 24, 2008
Oh man that face...
is disgusting. Pretty decent music and background, but you're putting details that are one not needed and two the choice in proportions just does not work. At step 4 you were good, at step five you beat her face in with a garbage lid and filled it with waste. Then you added the spinecrawling eyebrows, a huge neck (a man's neck), and she looks like one of those people at diners that you know have seen a rough ass time in their life. She looks like some trashy excuse for a life that gets by on very little as she watches reruns and talk shows as she sits down to eat her ice cream straight from the container.
My advice: with flash, convey realism, don't try to make it so. Flash is meant for clean lines and you're overdoing realism. It's like if you draw someone with pencil and paper and you include EVERYTHING it makes them look old and ugly. That is precisely what you've done here. You've goen too far and make me want to puke. Go from step for and include one shade of shadow or many consecutive layers CREATIVELY placed. Not how they are in real life, but how you want to CONVEY realism. The only flaw you have is you have realistic shading without realistic proportions OR colors. And of course it's too detailed, in all the wrong ways.
I do agree that the face doesn't look that good. It wouldn't make me puke though, but I see what you mean. I think I'll go with pencil art next time I do a tutorial, thanks for the harsh, but constructive criticism!