Score: 9

"In this one you've done well..."

submission: All The Trees

date: July 12, 2008

to have fluidity and creativity. Also the theme and style was the same throught the entire flash (which is good). The growing fit the pace of the music and it all worked well with the ideas you've put down. The repetiveness bothered me with the fruit being another fruit, being another fruit, and I'm glad you stopped at two, but if you only had a more creative way of conveying the idea instead of panning out. Also if you changed the mood a tad with each pan it would've been refreshing (simply a change in color used, not style, theme, or anything else that would detract from the cohesiveness.).

The lipsync could have been better, but it is better than most as is. Look at the sixth place in my favorites and look at the lip sync at the credits of that flash to know what I think is the best lip sync that I've seen. It's in profile view, but it's beautiful. "Royal Rumble II Part 2"

Score: 6

"You need better effects in some areas..."

submission: Breath Me Remake

date: July 12, 2008

The roses need to not use a shape tween to get across the dieing, the friend scene needs to have movement (maybe a different style of character to move and convey friendship).

Also just the matter of you conveying each lyric without any continuity. There wasn't any real development in the narration (of your animation). The takes on all these things were pretty literal, virtually no style (except in the begginning), and no real creativity shines through. Sure you can see it, but it looks more like a gimmick more than anything, something that's "cute".

I say think about developing things more and animating more rather than copying and pasting creatively. If you do a narration of a story the animation will be better, but if you stick with this style you need fluidity, you need for it to all fit. And at the moment this is a shallow shallow submission with a good song, but shallow to the core of it's animation. You had a few thoughts on the matter, but it's far too oversimplified and underthought. You may call yourself an animator, but in no way do I see any credibility of you calling yourself an artist.

Score: 10

"Apology accepted..."

submission: Mad Vlad II: Revamped

date: July 2, 2008

Well I'm going to cry now...

Score: 10

"To help anyone..."

submission: Lola Bunny Hentai Quiz

date: July 2, 2008

For I am fond of cheats and Hentai slideshows:

1,3,3,1
3,4,2,1
2,3,1,3
2,3,2,2

The quiz was interesting. I liked the idea of incorperating a question with the song in the background (I'm a fan of MSI). But I have to wonder how is it quiz makers stumble upon these questions that nearly noone else will have no clue to the answer. The pictures were good. Not my slice of pie mind you, but good. Nice quality and at the end that was a great little bonus. I sincerely enjoyed the game even if I didn't get off on it (strange, but I did). Whenever there is a picture like this I like to imagine it actually on TV and the circumstances in which it would come about.

Score: 4

"Look if you want to appeal to a larger group..."

submission: War of the samurai

date: June 30, 2008

Learn better english. I don't care what your mommy says about what you've done or how far you've come to speak such nice english, learn better english (better grammer) or be the subject to hardship and shame.

The animation was okay, but it defiantly could have been better. As I see it when you use sprites you need a story, a song, and/or character development. Especially when you're up against frame by frame animation (original frames) or tweening without the use of premade models. You got by sounding like a ten year old that has trouble with grammer (not someone foreign), but your response to one of the reveiws:

you do not know the critical case swim of English
Brazilians give us a damned hard so that "you" of other countries to see our animations still very much

Does not make a lick of sense. But like I said, I don't care about anyone that supports you and neither does most of Newgrounds. So stop whining and do better or you'll lose possible fans (because noone likes a pussy), votes (because people don't take kindly to being forced to like something) and your future on Newgrounds (because after all Newgrounds is made the way it is by it's veiwers). Pretty good animation, okay, but slightly irratating grammer, and poor poor conduct.

Score: 10

"This fits the old and great logo of Newgrounds..."

submission: The Bad Prank Call

date: June 26, 2008

"The problems of the future, today!" There hasn't been something this sick in A LONG TIME. THANK YOU FOR BEING TWISTED!!

Score: 7

"Oh man that face..."

submission: Ultimate Drawin Lesson

date: June 24, 2008

is disgusting. Pretty decent music and background, but you're putting details that are one not needed and two the choice in proportions just does not work. At step 4 you were good, at step five you beat her face in with a garbage lid and filled it with waste. Then you added the spinecrawling eyebrows, a huge neck (a man's neck), and she looks like one of those people at diners that you know have seen a rough ass time in their life. She looks like some trashy excuse for a life that gets by on very little as she watches reruns and talk shows as she sits down to eat her ice cream straight from the container.

My advice: with flash, convey realism, don't try to make it so. Flash is meant for clean lines and you're overdoing realism. It's like if you draw someone with pencil and paper and you include EVERYTHING it makes them look old and ugly. That is precisely what you've done here. You've goen too far and make me want to puke. Go from step for and include one shade of shadow or many consecutive layers CREATIVELY placed. Not how they are in real life, but how you want to CONVEY realism. The only flaw you have is you have realistic shading without realistic proportions OR colors. And of course it's too detailed, in all the wrong ways.

Score: 10

"That government is best..."

submission: sherry enema: #2

date: June 20, 2008

which governs least. Look at it this way: Criminals don't play by the rules anyways, so why would THEY follow the rule? If you ban guns, you're ultimately just taking away your defenses.

Great animation and good script. I liked the way you shaped the character the most with his voice and basically every line. Those few twinges of humanity did the best job of applying the character to the animation. Basically what I'm say is your character's color more than makes up for the lack of color.

Score: 8

"For the sake of your success,"

submission: stack da police (final)

date: June 19, 2008

DO NOT add voices. It'll become repetitive, annoying, and be a general headache. You know how children press the little noise makers in stores and the parents get pissed about it, well lets just say your players are the parents. Don't be a noisy brat.

It's good as is for a demo, I liked how you used real people as the characters and the simplicity of it. It may be too simplistic though and you may just be pushed aside for more complex games. Who knows...

Score: 10

"Well I'm going to point out the obvious..."

submission: Final Fantasy Jailbreak 1

date: June 18, 2008

That the narrator of this flash in the beggining is the same of the "Palidin" series. Whoo, go obvious me!
I remember watching these and having a good sense of witty video game humor that was well put together. Ah, but nowadays kids don't want something with intelligence when it comes to video game parodies and would rather have awesome degradation of taste to taunt the mind into a submissive drool. Luckily there is still submissions that have a cheery disposition even though composition of the jokes could be done better.